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Harley and Ivy pg03 by PorkchopExpress Harley and Ivy pg03 by PorkchopExpress
Harley, Ivy, and Killer Croc

It's a cramped page and one of the things that I was told during comic con was that I shouldn't have done what I did in the first panel and instead backed the camera way out to give perspective. Makes sense.

So amazing for these artists at the con to give up five minutes of their time to look at your work. Extremely cool to say the least.
Good page layout. I'll have to critique this from a "what I would do" standpoint because there's absolutely nothing wrong with what you have here.

Panel 1: Zoom Tighter on the left side of the panel so that all that you are closer to the ladies' faces and move Croc's hand to the left a bit to put it in panel and bring it closer to the 'camera'

Panel 2: Leave it as is

Panel 3: Only thing I would change here is to make Ivy's face a little larger or a little smaller so as to pull the bottom of her nose of the border line.

Panel 4: Pull in a little tighter on the scene. There realy isn't a need to show the back of the car.

Panel 5: This scene need to be more dynamic. Pull tighter on the girls. Make the perspective more extreme and drop the vanishing point down to about even with the middle of Ivy's thigh.

Again, you have a great page here and all I've suggested is how I would have done it.
What do you think?
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cmerwin6 Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2009  Professional General Artist
Overall the composition is good. I have a bit of issue with the legs on Harley and Ivy in the final panel. They look far to masculine.Also Harley's leg near the truck look's out of place ,not sure whether it is the foreshortening or the placement. Great Job.
PorkchopExpress Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2009
Cool. Thanks for looking.
cmerwin6 Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2009  Professional General Artist
No prob!
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